Perfect love (A haibun)

colleen’s tanka tuesday, poet’s choice;

slow wondering breeze
lacing desire in your touch
fluttering with dreams

He hears the call of love, akin to its inflections of hope as it whispers, immune to intonations of conspiracy in its song, deaf to the risk of treachery in its beat.

amorous lover
loving too much, quick to love
on quest for the one

She bears a tranquilizing beauty, a beauty that ensnares all in a lustful trance, capturing and taming love-soaked hearts. But she feels broken, having many that love her but none she can love.

oasis of love
his unwavering offer
beseeching her heart
giving all, taking nothing
A perfect love, the wrong love

https://colleenchesebro.com/2020/02/04/colleens-2020-weekly-tanka-tuesday-poetry-challenge-no-163-poetschoice/

20 Comments Add yours

  1. Superb poem, really felt the heartache in this and appreciate the way you explore the use of the word love in the context of the story and the poem itself, especially the love-soaked hearts line in particular.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      thank you so much for sharing your thoughts, love is very diverse and yet so similar, i wanted to capture as many layers as i could in this and yet keep it as one, glad you appreciate it.

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  2. Reblogged this on Where Genres Collide Traci Kenworth YA Author & Book Blogger and commented:
    A nice entry-haibun-in Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thanks Traci for this, xoxox

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      1. You’re more than welcome, Jude!

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  3. -Eugenia says:

    A heartfelt masterpiece, Jude.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      thank you so much Eugenia, it was very heartfelt

      Like

    1. judeitakali says:

      thank you so much Eugenia, ive been away a bit so i took a few days to see this

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  4. Stephen says:

    Oh no! I am so sorry, JUDE! I got mixed up in my replies, but YOU TOO have been promoted at the Go Dog Go Cafe today!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      ooh, thanks, lemme check this out

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  5. Vashti Q says:

    Beautiful, heartfelt poetry, Jude. I loved it! ❤

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    1. judeitakali says:

      thank you Vashti, glad you do

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  6. Commendable blog you have.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much. You too

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