Witness ( #haibun poetry )

Colleen’s Challenge

Night sky of wonder
strewn with delights and desires
birthing endless stars

Orion flexes a dazzling display to woo an aloof and shimmering Cassiopeia,
bathing the dark sky in a sintilating sparkle of beauty.
But none of it trickles onto the mundane earth below
Down beneath that gorgeous night-sky, an eerie squeal pierces the silence!

I stand sentinel on the doorstep of a beleaguered hut and turn to look inside,
thus I bare witness to the polarizing event within.
Icy shards scrape through my nerves as my gaze falls on the haggard features of a woman in agony.
The man besides her hums a gentle hymn in an attempt to soothe her pain and succor her strain.
‘Shut up!’ she yells at him, grimacing in effort, a steely resolve etching itself onto her wearied features.
She braces herself then bellows a final collosal scream that rents the night air

Silence- then a squeak and a flutter. The most beautiful cry serenades that moist room.
I stare at the ethereal scene before me, a tiny miracle nestles between the loving couple.

Outside, Cassiopeia succumbs to Orion’s lures and the heavens blossom in their revelry,
But in that tiny hut, amidst the smells of birth, lies a beauty that rivals even them

Night sky of wonder
strewn with delights and desires
birthing endless stars


Synonyms for COMFORT and WORN

32 Comments Add yours

  1. AmyRose🌹 says:

    Beautiful!! Very well done, Jude! Excellent correlation between stars and birth. I really loved this! Thank you! xo

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Glad you enjoyed it, I tried to write this inconspicuously for the mothers

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      1. AmyRose🌹 says:

        You succeeded most excellently!

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  2. Elizabeth says:

    ‘Birthing endless stars’ this is lovely!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Elizabeth. I’m glad you like it

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  3. Wow. Exceptional piece!

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        1. judeitakali says:

          Thank you, I was nervous I would not be able to do the underlying theme of child birth justice so I juxtaposed the constellation romance

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          1. that is perfect and beautiful.

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  4. Jude, this is stunning! I’ll be adding this one to my book!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Oh my😃 I’m so happy. I was afraid I might have made it too long to stand a chance of featuring

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      1. Not at all. Haibun offers us the one chance to choose the length of our prose. I’m glad you took advantage of that opportunity. ❤ Well done! ❤

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        1. judeitakali says:

          Thank you so much Colleen for appreciating.
          Btw I find it hard to use terse descriptive language to express beauty or sentiment because I read on your links that haibun prose has to be terse.

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          1. It all has to do with the brevity of language. Remember, in Japanese poetry, less is more. ❤

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  5. This is a beautiful poem, Jude. Awesome 👍👍👍

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      1. Welcome Jude 🙏🙏🙏

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