Celeste and the god of doom ( prose and poetry)

what do you see

So many had fallen!
So many had withered away in hopelessness
For seven years the land had moaned the sun’s demise
Seven long years of anguish and death
Seven years of Belokor’s revenge

But as heroes fell and crumbled all around,
Celeste prepared
horned her skills and sharpened her mind
Driven by hope and not revenge
by love for her people and not thirst for glory
For the prophecy went…

“When evil reigns
and darkness stains
When mighty men fight and die in pain
One will come, different from all the rest
To put evil to the test
And melt away all its disdain”

Her time had come!
She scaled the mountain of despair that had defeated and weakened so many before,
using the ancient paths she’d studied from the temple scrolls

“Belokor!” she yelled from the mountain peak, “I challenge you!”

In all his majesty, colossal and imperious, Belokor, the god of doom appeared before her,
taller than the clouds
bringer of pain and anguish
scourge of heroes…

From pain she will rise
through loss, strength she will attain
Compassion, her soul

Surprised by the sight of a woman,
stunned by her beauty and poise
and entranced by the scent of the blue orchid billowing off her robes,
he wanted to posses her.

Unbeknownst to him, Celeste had studied his weakness
learnt of the allure of that scent to sentient beings
As well as their lust for wagers and games

And so a bargain, they struck
a game of riddles
The sun and his banishment, her prize.
And She, his.
An oath was sworn
binding her and binding him

Child of suffering
nothing to lose and all to gain
your destiny calls

With every riddle failed,
his hold on the land wained
until finally it was relinquished
His form crumbled
and he moaned the loss of the beauty he would never claim

She stood basking in his demise,
As the sun beamed free at last

#whatdoyousee

30 Comments Add yours

  1. Pallavi says:

    She conquered, where mighty lost. Magic with words. Great job!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I looked long and hard at the image for her story to come to me, was so hard keeping it brief and doing the heroine justice, had to do the balancing act in the end, the poetry helped

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      1. Pallavi says:

        It was great! Very captivating.

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      2. judeitakali says:

        Thank you Pallavi🤗

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  2. You are getting better and better, Jude.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Robbie, that brightens my day. you would definitely know. Been with me almost since I had started ❤️

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      1. michnavs says:

        Ahhh i am in awe reading at such a lovely tale..

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      2. judeitakali says:

        Thank you so much ❤️ I’m glad you took the time to read and happy to have you share your thoughts 🌷

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  3. memadtwo says:

    Like the poetic tales of old…well done! (K)

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much, I couldn’t resist thinking of doing a classic tale, glad you enjoyed it K

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  4. Sadje says:

    A wonderful and magical story Jude. Thanks for being a part of the challenge.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Sadje. I’m glad you like it 🤗😁

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  5. Chris Hall says:

    A truly epic poem! Marvellous 🙂

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Chris, it’s a very exciting prompt, I’m definitely going to enjoy all the responses

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Chris Hall says:

        Oh yes, me too! It’s so interesting to see what we all make of these.

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  6. Oh, what a mesmerizing piece, my friend. I am captivated from the beginning till the end.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I’m so glad you are. I really wanted to tell her story. I saw a sassy, clever exciting heroine in this,

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      1. She is sassy. Wonderful story.

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      2. judeitakali says:

        Thank you for appreciating, I left out sassy details tho because I summed up the riddle game but that’s where she used her many gifts.
        Thanks for reading Gabriella ❤️

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  7. AmyRose🌹 says:

    Oh my goodness, Jude, this was mesmerizing. I was so taken away by your words. You weave magic in stories that binds the attention to its fullest. Absolutely wonderful!! Thank you! xo

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I’m so glad you enjoyed this Amy. I did want to tell a good old fashioned epic I’m the fewest words possible. I’m so happy it caught you in its thralls till the end, as it did me

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  8. -Eugenia says:

    Amazing piece, Jude! Your capture of the image is exquisite.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Eugi, this gladdens me so😁❤️

      Like

  9. msjadeli says:

    Such a beautiful metaphor. The riddles he was unable to answer is my favorite part. So glad the sun’s light returned.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Jade, I’m happy you appreciated this

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You are very welcome.

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  10. willowdot21 says:

    Brilliant story, I love a story told poetically 💜

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you for this beautiful comment

      Like

      1. willowdot21 says:

        It’s all true 💜

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