Love’s bane #Haibun

Colleen’s weekly challenge.

Love’s bane.

If you have to look, you will
never see
If you have seen, you need only to look.

Dark sinister night
Bullfrogs croak and crickets chirp
Prequels to silence

Your heartbeat flutters
I can feel it in the dark
My subconscious is attuned to its rhythm
All those nights we’ve lain so close
I’ve felt your heart’s every inflection
Known its needs before you’ve thought them
But not this time

This time your heart beats different
This time we tread an uncharted path
A dark way moist with fear
There is no compass to point us north
No map through spiteful contours
There is only a feeling!
Ominous
Deadly and foreboding!

I’ve always known your heartbeat,
Understood it,
But now there’s something else
An eerie presence lurking in these stygian shadows
A beast stalking our every move
Dread brewing in its wake
And I am scared!
Scared that we will never be the same
Scared that before our journey’s end,
Your heart will fade away from mine

For none can map a lover’s road,
When heartbreak prowls its every turn

Lonely nightingale
Sing us your love lullaby
May we never wake

Β© judeitakali


Colleen’s theme prompt Maps

I had to write this under the moonlight. There was a 24hr blackout and all my devices were not charged.

It was frustrating until I decided to make the most of it, then it was wonderfully nostalgic.
Had to dial down on the horror though. Too many unfamiliar night shadows.

I did have fun, trading modern comforts for traditional ways. Won’t make a habit of it though.

Hope you enjoy this. It’s quite metaphoric.

Stay safe everyone, stay loving.

50 Comments Add yours

  1. mariamichaela says:

    Glad you made the most out of the blackout. I did feel you were holding out on the horror but loved the way this turned out. Also, loving your avatar ❀️

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Michaela. I’m building up to a proper horror pieceπŸ˜‰

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      1. mariamichaela says:

        Always excited with what you come up with, Jude 😊

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      2. judeitakali says:

        πŸ’•πŸ’›πŸ§‘πŸ’›πŸŒ·

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  2. yassy says:

    Wonderfully written beautiful poetry. Your best. True poet ., always giving your best.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Wow. Thank you so much Yassy πŸ’›πŸŒΈ

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  3. Sadje says:

    Another gem.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thanks alot Sadje

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome πŸ˜‰

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  4. bejamin4 says:

    This is so good. And I really like this line: “Prequels to silence”. Sounds like a great title for something.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Oh thanks alot. Cheers 🍻

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      1. bejamin4 says:

        Welcome!

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  5. Elizabeth says:

    Yes, I did enjoy it! And knowing it was written under the moonlight, oh! it’s really magical!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I’m glad you appreciate the process. It was really nice. Thank you so much Elizabeth πŸ’•

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  6. “Lonely nightingale
    Sing us your love lullaby
    May we never wake”

    How gorgeous my dearest Jude.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I was particularly happy with that haiku. Glad to see you saw it tooπŸ’›πŸŒΈ

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      1. It’s wonderful 🌹

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  7. Roshni says:

    I’m at a loss of words here but I couldn’t leave without dropping a comment because this poem is beautifully beautiful….”For none can map a lover’s road, where heartbreak prowls its turn”. Wonderfully written, JudeπŸ‘πŸ‘

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Roshni. I’m really glad you liked itπŸ’›

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  8. Hi Jude. We have frequent blackouts in SA too. Candlelight is romantic but too dim to write in. A lovely, eerie poem!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Kim. I actually like candlelight. It works well for me

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  9. So much of emotions lurking in the dark… wonderful piece…

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much, I’m humbled πŸ™πŸΎ

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  10. HappySoul says:

    Written in the moonlight! Wow!
    Loved the last haiku and the last lines! Beautifully written!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you, I liked them too, they fit so well for me

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  11. kittysverses says:

    Talk about turning disadvantages to one’s advantage, weaving a superb piece of poem during blackout. Nicely done, Jude. πŸ™‚

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Kitty πŸ’•πŸŒΈ

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      1. kittysverses says:

        You are welcome, Jude. πŸ™‚

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  12. Shruba says:

    Such tender words plays on the heartstrings of anyone reads this. Beautifully worded. ❀

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Shruba. I’m humbled πŸ™πŸΎπŸ’•

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  13. Writing in the moonlight sound so beautiful! As is this poem. Excellent work, jude!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      It was actually, I had to squint a little though.

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      1. Maybe that added to the beauty of your poetry!

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      2. judeitakali says:

        I should have taken advantage and written a romantic piece, but I got torn in between horror and love

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      3. I hope you don’t have another blackout but in case you do, next time it could be romantic. I’ll be waiting for it!

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      4. judeitakali says:

        Thank you so much😊❀️

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  14. michnavs says:

    you are a poetic genius Jude..

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Oh thank you so much Michelle.

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  15. -Eugenia says:

    Amazing poetry and written under the moonlight! Wow! I love the line “prequels to silence”, and also feel it would make a great title.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Woah, that’s two people who have told me that. I like it now. Would make a great title for a book or future poetry collection

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      1. -Eugenia says:

        Yes, it would!

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  16. Jules says:

    Trying new directions is always a fun challenge. I thought Hansel and Gretel getting caught in the Gingerbread Candy house…
    But they escaped! Or at least in one version they did.

    Though I think your direction was leading elsewhere. As if some negative force were separating a loving couple and only in death could they escape it.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      The negative force is heartbreak. A monster that splits take greatest of loves. And is unpredictable hence making love ‘unmapable.’

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  17. Gave me the chills Jude.. an excellent response to this week’s prompt..

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Di. It means alot

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Traci. I’m so grateful

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      1. You’re welcome, Jude!

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  18. Written under the moonlight makes this piece so special! The oracle has been sending you messages! Brilliant work. I can’t wait until Halloween! We should have a Halloween horror poetry contest! πŸ˜€

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