Spirit Invasion. A garland cinquain collaboration

There was a time we did not believe.
When mist was merely moisture,
And the distant rumble in the night,
Was but thunder from afar.
There was a time all shadows were bound to objects.
Shaped by light,
Afraid of darkness.

That time is no more.
Now we have seen
Now we have felt
And now we are aware
But so are they!

Ice cold
Back and forth those,
eyes hastily juggle
Cries of flocking bats, cut through pained-
silence!

Nameless
They prowl lost caves
Tunneling beneath us
And the earth rumbles in disgust
Befouled

Murmurs
defiant, that
swarm from quarters unknown.
Beyond the grey mountains rustle
Up wind

The veil
Nature’s facade
Ripped from valley to peak
Evil catching the scent of good!
Thirsting

Beware
The changing winds
Things, more than meets the eye
Red alleyways of serpentine-
darkness

Ice cold
They prowl lost caves
Swarm from quarters unknown
Evil catching the scent of good!
Darkness

There was a time we did not believe.
When scratches beneath the bed were simply nightmares,
When sighs in the closet were just imagination,
When those we buried were gone forever.

That time is no more
The darkness is now sentient
And the light has sent its warriors
Too few
But the battle has began!

(Part 1 of 2) To be continued…


I hope you enjoy this latest collaboration;
Aishwarya did the bits in bold,
And I patched up with the rest.

To see more collaborations on my site, click HERE
And if you’d like to collaborate with me, email judekirya37@gmail.com

Please go on over and explore Aishwarya’s sight; Kittyverses

I’m craving your thoughts, let us know what you think.

This mist don’t scare us.

Also for Colleen’s syllabic challenge – synonyms for past and present.

Stay safe everyone, Stay loving.

A garland cinquain is a combination of six cinquains, the last of which is comprised of a line from each of the five before.
Each cinquain has a syllable count of 2/4/6/8/2
Hope I explained that well.

P.S

Watch out for the January issue of THE SATURDAY SYMPHONY this weekend (now a monthly feature)

67 Comments Add yours

  1. Ruelha says:

    Such a beautiful collaboration Jude. Both you and Aishwarya did a fine job…..I’m still trying to figure out the layers beneath……lovely

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Ruelha, feel free to email for details, lolπŸ˜…

      Anyway, it’s just plausible fiction to enjoy. Not quite that layeredπŸπŸ™πŸΎ

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      1. Ruelha says:

        Fiction you say, eh? πŸ˜‰πŸ˜…πŸ€©πŸŽ€πŸ™ƒ
        Aah…..I hide under that too…πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰

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      2. judeitakali says:

        Haha, it’s not like that, this one really is spooky fiction poetry.
        Otherwise most of my work is indeed layered, and I ain’t hiding πŸ˜‰πŸ˜…β€οΈπŸ€—πŸ™πŸΎπŸŒ·

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      3. Ruelha says:

        Okay….I believe you Jude…I’m just troubling yaπŸ˜‰πŸ˜…πŸ˜†

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      4. judeitakali says:

        Roger that ☺️

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      5. Ruelha says:

        Very well penned you guys….πŸŽ€πŸ€©πŸŽ€

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  2. Pallavi says:

    Spooky..nicely done. Kudos to the both of you.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Pallavi. I’m glad you like it.πŸ’œπŸ

      Like

  3. michnavs says:

    Wow this gave me goosebumps..good job you twoπŸ’•πŸ’•πŸ’•

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thanks alot Michelle. Glad to have you reading.

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  4. kittysverses says:

    Thanks for the collab, Jude. πŸ™‚

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you too KittyπŸ€—

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  5. kittysverses says:

    Reblogged this on Kitty's Verses and commented:
    A collaboration :- Garland Cinquain

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  6. Beautiful collaboration Jude.
    xoxo

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Gabriella ❀️🍁

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      1. My pleasure πŸŒΉπŸ€—

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  7. Fantastic piece, loved it!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much πŸ™πŸΎ
      Glad you liked it

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much πŸ™πŸΎπŸ

      Like

  8. mariamichaela says:

    Fantastic collaboration. That was a chilling read.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Hi Mikayla. So glad you found it that way. Hopefully the final part 2 will be out in a few weeks and will give it an epic ending.πŸ’•πŸ

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      1. mariamichaela says:

        You know I’ll be looking out for it! 😁

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      2. judeitakali says:

        πŸ€—πŸ’•πŸ

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  9. Alexander De says:

    So well done! The mood is nailed tight to the reader’s chest.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much. Glad you appreciate itπŸ™πŸΎπŸ

      Like

  10. Dora says:

    Brilliantly done! A plot to give the chills and then some. Kudos to both of you

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Hey Dora ❀️
      Thank you so much. Glad you liked it.
      I’m thinking about writing something religious once or twice a month, for my faith. I hope you’ll find them and I’ll value your input.
      I think I’ll write one next week.
      πŸ’“πŸ

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      1. Dora says:

        Oh that’s wonderful, Jude. I’m looking forward to it already. πŸ˜€β€οΈπŸ’œ

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      2. judeitakali says:

        β€οΈπŸπŸ™πŸΎ

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  11. Tara Sitser says:

    Wonderfully well done! So stunningly affecting. I will be checking my closet before I get into bed tonight…….

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Haha, thanks alot Tara, you better check.
      But I think you’re safe.

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  12. Ingrid says:

    This is very dramatic and intriguing…I look forward to the next installment!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Ingrid. I’ll do my best to make the final part worth it.
      *We’ll do our best.

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      1. Ingrid says:

        I’m sure it will be 😊

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  13. Love how you created the atmospherics! Aishwarya and Jude, masterfully crafted. β€οΈπŸ’™

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much PunamπŸ™πŸΎπŸπŸ’œ

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      1. You are welcome. πŸ˜ŠπŸ’™

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  14. memadtwo says:

    The dark atmosphere flows beautifully. (K)

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much K

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  15. -Eugenia says:

    Wow! Brilliant collaboration! This stanza is amazing!
    “The veil
    Nature’s facade
    Ripped from valley to peak
    Evil catching the scent of good!
    Thirsting”

    Bravo!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Eugi. It means so much πŸ™πŸΎπŸ
      Hope the final part will bring it home

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      1. -Eugenia says:

        I look forward to the final part! 🀩

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  16. Jules says:

    A lovely collaboration indeed.

    I think the worst monsters are a combination of those we can’t as well as those we can see. You remind me of a comic we have here where a little boy offers different solutions to keep his closet monster in his closet. But often the Father Monster questions if his little monster will ever be able to follow in his footsteps.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Haha, sounds very interesting.
      Thank you so much Jules πŸπŸ™πŸΎ

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      1. Jules says:

        It’s all perspective. I saw a comic in the paper today of Covid 19 virus images walking around with “The End is Near” signs. (Referring to the vaccines coming…
        https://www.comicskingdom.com/rhymes-with-orange Look for Fri, Jan 29th 2021 comic. (My paper is black and white, but the computer image is in color!)

        Stay safe. I’ve also read there are some ‘new’ variants/ strains…

        Like

  17. vaniheart says:

    Ok I read this at night time with my room’s light off😢😢😢
    Chills😈😈😈

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Oops, hope the warriors of light were a comfort. The final part 2 should be quite the ending 🀞🏾🍁☺️

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  18. I really like this! As someone who reads and writes fiction, loves nature and plays video games. You got me on several levels with this! πŸ™‚ I also love learning new words and “Cinquain” is a new one for me. I’ve never been much into poetry until now and sudden I can’t stop writing Haikus. Ha, ha,ha. Well, I could always come up with worse addictions in a pandemic!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Haha, yeah there are definitely worse addictions.
      Haiku really get me too, since I first discovered them, until I came across other syllabic poems like cinquains,Shadorma,etheree,tanka,…
      I’m so glad you enjoyed this. Look out for the final part 2🍁🧑☺️

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  19. Spatika says:

    Love it!😘

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Spatika ☺️🍁🧑

      Like

  20. You have so perfectly penned it. I must appreciate the way you have delinated your thoughts. Just great!!
    But hey! I am a new blogger and this will surely inspire me a ton. I have started my blogging page on positivity and motivation. It will mean world to me if you pay a vist!
    I will be eagerly waiting for your feedbacks and if you like then shower some love .
    Thank you and have a great day!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much. I’ll check it out

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      1. Thank you so very much! Yes please visit my blog. This will mean a lot to me.
        Have a great day!

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  21. Jude, this is absolutely stupendous! What a great idea! Have fun and I can’t wait to see what you guys come up with! ❀

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Colleen. This means so so much from you ❀️

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Awww, you guys are brilliant poets. You deserve the recognition! ❀️

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  22. Reblogged this on Word Craft ~ Prose & Poetry and commented:
    Jude shares a layer to our challenge: He asks for Cinquain Collaborators! How cool is that?

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    1. judeitakali says:

      thank you Colleen

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      1. You’re most welcome. ❀️

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  23. Smitha V says:

    Beautiful collaboration Jude and well explained.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Smitha🧑

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