Stars and Shadows #poetry

Those guns were meant to aid
Their pelt and spray soothed her
For silence brought terror
As lust roamed ranks

By day they smiled
By night they leered
But the needs of many
Pinned her with fear
Submission and silence!
And the stars watched on
As shadows preyed

A ballerina boy
A Girl with need for speed
Outcasts who would not heed-
Paths preordained

Maimed for his difference
Blamed for her defiance
The cost of preservation-
Was breaking their spirits
Casting them to despair and disillusionment!
Yet still the stars watched
As the shadows held sway

And so my conscience squirms
How far will karma go
For one who sees and knows
And yet, ignores

Above it all, can’t you see
The beauty, and the ugly
Will you watch and wait
Or reach and aid
For if the stars watch on
Eventually
All they’ll see is shadow!

Β© judeitakali


For Colleen’s poet’s choice

I hope you enjoy this, the syllabic poems in bold are called abhanga (6/6/6/4) with the 2nd and 3rd lines rhyming, otherwise this was mostly freestyle.

Your thoughts are most welcome!

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49 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    It’s a very moving poem Jude. Pills at the emotions. Very strong message

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Sadje for saying this and always reading πŸ’œ

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      1. Sadje says:

        It’s always my pleasure Jude.

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  2. mariamichaela says:

    Tugs the heart.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Hi, just emailed today. Thanks for appreciating this Michaela πŸ™πŸΎπŸ’œ

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  3. kittysverses says:

    Enjoyed the closing lines very much, Jude. πŸ™‚

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Great to see you Kitty. I’m visiting soon. Hope you’re well.

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      1. kittysverses says:

        I’m fine, Jude , thank you. Hope you are doing well. πŸ™‚

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      2. judeitakali says:

        I’m okay too.

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  4. Strong message with strong and beautiful poem πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much πŸ™πŸΎ glad you appreciate it πŸ’œ

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  5. eunice says:

    This is very touching.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. judeitakali says:

      Thanks alot Eunice πŸ™πŸΎπŸ’œπŸ•ŠοΈ

      Like

  6. Aparna says:

    Amazing as usually 😊

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Hey Aparna. Thank you so much. Hope you’re well.

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      1. Aparna says:

        I am great sir 😊
        Hope you are doing great as well
        Stay safe and Keep blogging πŸ’πŸ’

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      2. judeitakali says:

        πŸ™πŸΎπŸ•ŠοΈ

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  7. sammicakes says:

    a story of two people with all their misery and hope they hold in a cruel world–love it!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Sammi. I’m so glad to see you here. Means a lot.

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      1. sammicakes says:

        Of course, my pleasure ❀

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  8. A very intriguing and thought provoking poem, Jude.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Robbie for appreciating the depth.

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  9. This was totally brilliant. I love the addition of the Abhanga in with the prose poetry. There is just something special about adding the syllabic verse in with the prose. LOVE it. Mr. Linky is fixed. I can’t add your link. Sorry you will have to do it. I figured out what happened last week. When you “reshared” your post it changes the date. At least I think that is it. ❀

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I added mine. Thank you so much Colleen for appreciating. I discovered the wonders of adding syllabic poetry into my prose a while ago and have never turned back, I’m sure you can tell. πŸ˜€πŸ’œπŸ•ŠοΈ

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      1. And you’re the reason I wanted to add prose poetry. Once a month prose poetry is a great way to bring in new poets too! I actually love the combination of the forms. It’s creative! 😍❀️

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      2. judeitakali says:

        Haha, I often think I push your buttons, using the loopholes in the challenge guidelines 😁

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      3. Nope! Not at all. I’d rather you be creative. As long as there is at least one syllabic form (the rest of the month) I’m good. LOL! πŸ˜€

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      4. judeitakali says:

        πŸ’œπŸ™πŸΎπŸ€©

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  10. D.L. Finn, Author says:

    Powerful and beautifully said, Jude. The last two lines said it all.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Ahh, means alot from you D. Finn. Thank you so much.

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  11. willowdot21 says:

    This is just amazing, you have said so much and the message.is loud and clear.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Great having you read Willow. Thank you so much.

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      1. willowdot21 says:

        Always a pleasure

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  12. Zsoro says:

    For if the stars watch on…

    πŸ₯Ί

    Great poem

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much πŸ™πŸΎ

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  13. memadtwo says:

    Intense! Many questions, always, to ask ourselves. (K)

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you KπŸ™πŸΎπŸ™πŸΎ

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  14. Janani says:

    Indifference is just as bad.
    Beautiful words Jude!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Janani πŸ™πŸΎπŸ’œ

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  15. I love it! Sometimes we find beauty even during the darkest times.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Yes indeedπŸ™πŸΎπŸ’œ

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  16. Jules says:

    Too often rules are enforced by those with armaments.
    I remember going to a country a few years ago where there were soldiers in a shopping mall.

    Tolerance is something that often isn’t taken into consideration by people in power.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I am in such a country now. It’s the new normal.

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      1. Jules says:

        One can only hope for better…
        (((Hugs)))

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