
At the end
my journey begins
At sunset
the soul’s path
Hope’s music shelters terror
Bandstand beginnings
The person I see in the mirror is not me.
It hurts that I’ve lived with this stranger for so long
In my bandstand of dreams, the shadows grow long
Who am I, and who must I be?
What do I want, and what wants me most?
The darkness hungers! It pines for my soul! For all hope to fail; and to fill it with despair

Why not now?!
Take me or leave me!
Igrow tired!
This haunting-
It devours and rots within
Savours my demise
I trudge a world of billions
And yet my journey is lonely
Round each bend there is no end
The road goes on
And evil stalks my every step
A scrape on gravel
A snap of twig
Coarse
Brazen
Nightmares closer than dreams
The light calls
But it never comes
I hold on-
To a glimpse
To a future beyond woe
To you; my darling!

The person I see in the mirror is me; without you!
ยฉ judeitakali
If you missed my last post, then you missed me saying my September is a month for dark writings, though I don’t know how romance crept into this at the end. I hope you enjoy it.
Always eager for your thoughts.
Also for;
- Colleen’s syllabic challenge – Shadorma(3/5/3/3/7/5)
- Reena’s exploration challenge – “The person I see in the mirror is not me.It hurts that I’ve lived with this stranger for so long”
- Writephoto prompt – Bandstand
- Eugi’s weekly prompt – Journey
- Sadje’s whatdoyousee image prompt
Stay safe everyone, Stay loving. I’ll be catching up with your sites tomorrow.
57 responses to “Hopes and fears. A #shadorma tale”
Lovely, Jude, definitely had a romantic feel to it. ๐
Is this a reverse poem?
“At the end
my journey begins
At sunset
the soulโs path
Hopeโs music shelters terror
Bandstand beginnings”
Thank you so much for joining in the challenge:
https://new2writing.wordpress.com/2021/09/02/writephoto-bandstand/
KL โค
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Thank you Caley. I didn’t intend it to be a reverse poem, just a meaningful Shadorma. But now that you mention it, it could be. ๐๐
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Hlo
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Light calls
but it never comes…
Beautiful lines!
Romance did creep in at the end with the WDYS prompt. Thank Sadje! ๐
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Haha, I wish I could tag her in this comment and thank her. When I lined up the prompts, I thought there had to be something positive at the end or beginning because I couldn’t bring myself to darken sadje’s beautiful photo ๐ ๐
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Hii
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Reblogged this on Reena Saxena and commented:
Hopes and fears …….. by judeitakali
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I love the way that sweet photo turned your dark piece around like that; reading it up to that point, I was feeling so forlorn. ๐ข๐
PS How’s the novel coming along, Jude?
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Hehe it was going to have a gruesome ending but I’ll keep that for next week๐
I am punching and punching at every available moment to make sure I get a worthwhile copy to you by beginning of October, and then we can have some serious but fun editing debates.
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Looking forward to it!
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Wonderful journey of thoughts, or soliloquy with yourself! I like your wandering thoughts Jude. Iโm glad you were able to include my photo in your poem. Thanks
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Thank you Sadje, hope you read Reena’s and Chris’ comments just before yours๐๐พ๐ท
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I just did. I take some credit for the happy ending! Youโre welcome my friend
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Loved the poem ๐
You never fails to amaze me from your work ๐ค
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Thank you so much Aparna๐๐พ๐ท
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A beautiful ending to the fears and tribulations life holds in this journey. Lovely and seamless weave of all the prompts Jude ๐
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Thanks alot for the appreciation Radhika.
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Reblogged this on OPENED HERE >> https:/BOOKS.ESLARN-NET.DE.
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Thank you ๐๐พ
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You have become so adept at weaving different prompts and styles into a cohesive piece! Wonderful, Jude.
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I’m glad you appreciate Punam. Sometimes I like navigating multiple prompts but it has to feel right and fun for me.
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Absolutely, that is very important. My pleasure, Jude.
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I second Punam here. This is too good, Jude. ๐
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Thank you so much Kitty. ๐๐๐พ
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You are welcome, Jude. ๐
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My journey of reading your poetry was wonderous, Jude! Your weaving of words around prompts is amazing. Bandstand beginnings – love the uniqueness of this line. ๐คฉ
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Thank you so much Eugi. Just one of many Sparks of inspiration I get whenever I decide to line up multiple prompts. I’m glad you liked it ๐๐
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My pleasure, Jude!
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I suppose I am glad that you meant to have it seem dark because there was a sadness throughout, some sort of hopelessness. Nice job!
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Thank you so much Xtine๐๐พ
I just changed my mind at the last with the final prompt which if I’d placed at the beginning, would have allowed for a somber or even nervy ending.
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Beautiful, a bit dark, sad….and yes, I loved it ๐ป
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Thank you Michaela โฃ๏ธ ๐ทโค๏ธ
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“The person I see in the mirror is not me.
It hurts that Iโve lived with this stranger for so long” This line gets me. Loved the pictures you used the the way you take us through your whole poem. ๐
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Thank you so much Daphny. Reena’s prompt was almost irresistible ๐๐พ๐ท
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Glaf you took on it, its execptional ๐
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Jude, how brilliant of you to fit all of these challenges into one poetic extravaganza! As for those hopes and fears… you got this, my friend. โค
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Thank you so much Colleen. ๐๐พ๐ท๐
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Sometimes we look to others to complete us! Iโm starting to learn this is a mistake: but an intoxicating one! Great poem, Jude.
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Jude,
Your words never lose their power to transport. Hope you are well.
pax,
dora
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This poem is eye compelling. Thankyou ๐๐ฅ๐คญ๐ต๏ธ
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I found this so beautiful and it really resonated with me, i had to reblog it and give u credit for such a beautiful poem
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The picture makes this poem all the more powerful. Well done!
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Beautiful
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The ending got me
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Some months seem to cast longer shadows. ‘Round my parts it is December when the days are short and what ever sun shines seems only to gift shades of grey.
I don’t think we have to be Narcissistic but I think loving ourselves can help us see the twin lights of hope and love.
Some journey’s seem like they will never have an ending. I wonder how some of the folks who reach into their 100’s feel about how their lives have played out. If they are still able mentally to think…
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Love this
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Thank you so much ๐๐พ
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This is so beautiful. Such an awesome expressions of nature.
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Thank you so much for the appreciation.
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