The big house. Part 1 of 2 #shorttales #halloweentales

There is a place on the outskirts of Jean’s childhood town
A place with the most beautiful house she has ever seen
Its turreted bedrooms and extensive balconies seem shaped from her very own imagination
A house with so much personality she can hear it call; speak to her, whisper of a future only ‘it’ can provide.

To most, this house was simply known as ‘The big house’
To her, it was the house of her dreams.
Its windows caught the sun so wonderfully; eloping in shimmering splendour
And through every hour on long summer days it sparkled with invitation; and My! how Jean longed for it.

Longing for home. Art by DJH

Surrounding the big house is a large compound patched in gorgeous lawns and multicolored gravel-stones.
Trimmed trees and exquisite floral hedges grow just in the right places(Jean wouldn’t change a thing)
To one who walks by, the place feels like a prodigal child of nature; blessed with only the unblemished side of her beauty
But like all paramours of the sun, the big house casts very long shadows
Shades so dark they mimick twilight
Shadows so solid they seem to come alive.

Underneath the sun
I shield scorched eyes from the truth
And wait for darkness
For the softness of secrets
And pleasures of discovery

Painting by Jennie Hallbrown.

Jean is grown up now
A lifetime of downs is finally on the up
Passion and sacrifice have fattened her once very thin coffers
And at last she can afford her childhood house of dreams!
She moves in without question
Without hesitation
But alas, she forgets the thing we all forget when seeking dream homes; she forgets to see it in the night!

Beyond twilight the big house changes
Its smiling windows begin to glare
And though its compound is lit sufficiently, the trees and flowers seem to hide
As though skulking from the house’s menacing gaze

There is a room at the back of the big house. It smells funny; sweet like rotting honey. Jean finds this room the night she moves in, still eager to feel every inch of her new home. It does not seem like part of the house. It feels- different!

Through the kitchen, there is a scullery
And in the scullery, there’s a door
A locked door
The only door without a key! The door to this most peculiar room.
On that door is a message; written or rather scratched;
“Leave now, or you never will!”
When Jean reads this message, she feels an odd shiver tremble through her body
A mixture of fear and excitement
For how she loves a mystery, and yet how little she knows of horror.
But in any case; why would she ever want to leave – her house of dreams!

The next day, Jean would open that door…

© judeitakali


Hi everyone, I would have considered it criminal to miss out on the official horror month. Big thanks to Michaela of Maria Michaela blog for subtly coaxing this out of me. So here I am with another two part series. It gets tense(er) in the final part 2, which I’ll write and post this Sunday (24th).

I so look forward to hearing your thoughts on this(in as much detail as you can) I’ll be catching up on blogs and sites as best as I can throughout the next twelve hours (yeah I missed alot while away)

Be safe everyone. Be loving.

Part 2

44 responses to “The big house. Part 1 of 2 #shorttales #halloweentales”

    1. Thank you Sadje. I wish I could do an audio of this. It’s so right out loud.

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      1. I can imagine. You’re welcome

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  1. It’s a scary story, but I still love the poetic sentences you put in. It smells funny ;sweet like rotting honey… welcome back

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    1. Thank you so much Jane for the appreciation and the welcome. 🤗💜

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      1. Most welcome Jude👍🏻

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  2. Sometimes desire is too strong for intuition. (K)

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    1. Very nicely put K. 💜

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  3. lovely and at the same time scary read with a beautiful painting.

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    1. Thank you so much. I’m glad you like it. I was afraid I was a little too subtle with the horror bits.

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      1. And those horror bits made it more interesting. 👏👏

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  4. Nicely written. Engaging and suspenseful. It leaves you wanting more. for certain.

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    1. I’m so glad you think so LaDonna. Thank you so much 😊💜

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  5. Yay! And you delivered yet again, Jude! I can’t wait for the second part! ☺️

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    1. I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks for the nudge. 🙏🏾💜

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  6. Oh, My! Jean. She’s a naive one, isn’t she? And she forgot/overlooked checking out the house in the light?!
    Oh man, already giving me a scare.
    I’m sure the rest of this story is very revealing. Don’t make it too scary please. 😜
    Thanks for sharing. Awesome, J. ♥️

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    1. Thank you so much Selma for the appreciation. Hehe I don’t even know how not to make it scary.

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  7. Oh, my, a compelling and haunting tale, Jude! Wonderfully penned and I am looking forward to part 2.

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    1. Thank you so much Eugi. I’m glad you liked it. 🙏🏾💜

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      1. My pleasure, Jude. 😉

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  9. HI Jude, this is lovely and creepy.

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    1. Glad you like it Robbie.

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  10. I can’t wait to see what happens next! I’m catching up on some of my favorite blogs (hint: you’re one of them!) Maybe you’ve already written it and all I have to do is catch up!

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    1. Thank you so much Melanie. I’m writing it today and posting tomorrow. 💜🌷💜

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  11. […] For a more emersive experience, I recommend you read the prequel here; The Big House […]

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  12. This is beautifully composed, Jude. I saw your comment about recording it. Have you looked at anchor.fm? It’s something on my to do list.

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    1. I haven’t. It’s just that I actually wrote it to be narrated. That’s when the repetition really hits home.

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      1. I always read poetry out loud anyway. Even if I have to whisper 😉

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  13. Bravo, I can’t wait to read what happens next!! ❤

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    1. Thanks alot Colleen. Glad you liked it. 💜

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    1. Thank you Shreya. You may prefer the part 2 titled “door of whispers)

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      1. Sure, I will give it a read.

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  14. Reminds me a bit of the famed Winchester house…
    Creepy rooms, one that had three entrances but only one exit.
    And many staircases to nowhere at all!

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    1. Gosh, that’s definitely a recipe for haunting. Or for an adventure?

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      1. I think they did give tours (At the Winchester Mansion). But I’m not sure if I’d want to go?
        Sarah had three bedrooms… (I think I remember hearing or reading, slept in a diffent one everynight to ward off thte ‘ghosts’.

        https://www.winchestermysteryhouse.com/gallery/

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  15. It’s not always good to have your dreams come true. (K)

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    1. Very true. alas experience is often the best or only teacher of what would be good for us😭

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