Door of whispers #shortstories #poetry

For a more emersive experience, I recommend you read the prequel here; The Big House

Door of whispers

Most doors are bolted for good reason
And yet it is these doors that call the loudest!
To a soul that yearns for discovery, curiosity becomes intoxicating.
The deliciousness of the unknown;
The risk that it may seduce an exciting blessing,
Or else summon a dreaded curse

There were many signs for Jean to let that door be;
its honeyed rotting smell,
the peeling scabbed boards,
and those horrid scrapes that groaned on the very edge of intuition.
Yet all this was not enough to stop her
For Jean had a wonderful habit of breaking barriers
And a thirst for discovering the pleasures that often lay beyond conformity
A habit that meant there was no door she wouldn’t open!

Like Jean’s aunt Lisa used to say; Ignoring is far worse than ignorance, because ignoring haunts you.

Open doors have brought me here
But closed ones have always called loudest
Of mystery’s taste
And tension’s fear

I long to sate
Lost dreams so near
For open doors have brought me here
But closed ones have always called loudest

I hear the whispers all so clear
For what lies beyond, my thought is possessed
‘Let us out’ the whispers sincere
The scent of discovery, urges my soul to haste
For open doors have brought me here
But closed ones have always called loudest.

To Jean’s disappointment; the locked door led to a tiny empty room.
A chill is all that escaped that darkness.
A chill that Jean would come to dread. For later, while tucked in bed, everything would change:

A faceless voice is a subtle fear
But when it says the spiteful things it said to Jean that night,
there are few greater terrors.
And when this faceless voice grows a set of cold faceless fingers,
there are few things more horrible.
For that night,
In her large house of dreams, with all it’s locked and open doors,
Jean’s haunting would begin!

ยฉ judeitakali


Hello everyone, a few unfortunate events stopped me from posting this on time but I hope ‘better late than never’ can rescue me a bit. Apologies to those who might have been waiting for this final part 2.

I hope you enjoy this. Be safe everyone, be loving.

60 Comments Add yours

  1. Daphny Aqua says:

    Better late than never did save you ๐Ÿ˜ I loved it, its totally worth the wait ๐Ÿค—

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Haha phewx. thank you so much Daphny. I’m glad you liked it ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ’œ

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      1. Daphny Aqua says:

        You’re most welcome, waiting for the next one ๐Ÿ˜โค๏ธ

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      2. judeitakali says:

        ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜Š๐ŸŒท๐Ÿ’œ

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  2. memadtwo says:

    A chilling beginning to my day! As always your words flow seamlessly between poetryand prose. (K)

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much for the appreciation Kerfe๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ๐Ÿ’œ

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  3. Reena Saxena says:

    Reblogged this on Reena Saxena and commented:
    Doors of whispers …… by Jude Itakali

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  4. Lovely writing Jude. I thoroughly enjoyed the premise and your wonderful take on leaving well enough alone. Hope all is well with you๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Suzette. I’m glad you enjoyed it. All is better now, thank you ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ

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      1. Excellent. Good to hear.

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  5. Reena Saxena says:

    Probably the voice keeps the face hidden, and enjoys what happens to us in anticipation.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Reminds me of something I came across “Knowing something gives you power over it”

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      1. Reena Saxena says:

        Absolutely ๐Ÿ‘

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  6. eunice says:

    Smart one. I enjoyed it.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Eunice. I’m glad you liked it.

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  7. KL Caley says:

    Brilliant Jude. I particularly liked this line “Like Jeanโ€™s aunt Lisa used to say; Ignoring is far worse than ignorance, because ignoring haunts you.” Very well done. KL โค๏ธ

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Caley. I’m so glad you liked it. Means alot. ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ๐Ÿ’œ๐ŸŒท

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  8. Jane Aguiar says:

    Awesome! You are very good in prose as well as poetry, Jude….hope everything is ok with you๐Ÿ’–

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Jane. Things are better. I always have my little things that bail me out of testing times. I’ll be over to yours soon. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ’œ

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      1. Jane Aguiar says:

        You are always welcome, Jude ๐Ÿ’ฏ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป

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  9. Chris Hall says:

    Awesome, Jude. I really admire your sublime poetic craft. I’m having a stab at syllabic poetry, although I doubt it’ll surface anytime soon. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Chris. I think I was lucky that when I began really writing poetry, i came across colleen’s site and so I’ve always been improving and practicing with that sort of comprehensive approach.

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      1. Chris Hall says:

        I’ve just started reading her ‘Word Craft’ book on the subject.

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  10. Sadje says:

    A chilling poem Jude. Perfect for Halloween

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Sadje๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ’œ

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      1. Sadje says:

        Youโ€™re welcome my friend

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  11. A writer is never late, nor is he early. He writes precisely when he means to 😁. May have borrowed that line from Gandalf but this was worth the wait! I’m pretty sure Jean has regretted opening that door.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Haha, yeah I know that line. Some doors lead to Narnia but unfortunately not this one๐Ÿ˜จ

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      1. Quite unfortunate indeed! Yikes!

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  12. This was absolutely brilliant! I love poetic stories such as this. There is so much creativity in your word choice. The rhyming accentuates the storytelling! โค

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    1. judeitakali says:

      I’m so happy you say that. Thank you so much Colleen.

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      1. You’re so welcome. Well deserved. โค

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  13. Terrific writing, Jude! Your prose and poetry is woven skillfully.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      That means so much Punam. Thank you so much ๐Ÿ’œ๐Ÿ’œ๐ŸŒท

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  14. -Eugi says:

    A beautiful poetic story that you so skillfully crafted! I’m sorry I took so long to comment but I am moving my site to a self-hosted site.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Oh, a dream for me some day as well. I’m glad you’re here, and that you like it. Like I said, better late than…

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      1. -Eugi says:

        My pleasure, Jude! โค๏ธ

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  15. What a twist. I did not see the end coming. Good one, Jude!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much Amy. ๐ŸŒท๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ

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  16. LaDonna Remy says:

    Well worth the wait. Your stories always bring such good visuals and emotions. I really loved these lines โ€œA faceless voice is a subtle fear. But when it says the spiteful things it said to Jean that night,
    there are few greater terrors.
    And when this faceless voice grows a set of cold faceless fingers,there are few things more horribleโ€ . This leads the imagination all kinds of places. Excellent as always ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ’—. I hope all is well for you ๐Ÿ’—.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Im so glad you enjoyed it LaDonna๐Ÿ’œ. Thank you. All is getting better.๐ŸŒท

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      1. LaDonna Remy says:

        I am glad to hear this ๐Ÿ’—๐Ÿ’—

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  17. Elizabeth says:

    This post is beautiful, doors can hold many secrets, and for sure they attract us by whispering.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Elizabeth ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ
      Good to have you reading again.

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  18. This certainly is a creepy poem, Jude. Well done.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you Roberta. Most of it is prose though.

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      1. Well yes, sort of like a haibun.

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  19. Ingrid says:

    Truly haunting Jude!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Glad you enjoyed it Ingrid ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿพ

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  20. Jules says:

    Nightmares that breach reality are truly scary!

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Very much so… ๐Ÿฅถ

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  21. Door and door… Beautiful poem…

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you very kindly.

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  22. cbd oil says:

    I like this a lot lol

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so kindly.

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  23. Very nice! Thanks for sharing.

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    1. judeitakali says:

      Thank you so much.

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