
The shadows of my loss
Linger-on inside me
They cling to scraps of thee
Gone forever
Pain rattles in this void
My heart, broken of you
My mind, frozen on who
I am empty
The past grips my present
How delicious its kiss!
How tempting its lost bliss!
Soul’s denial

Salvation is calling to me
Through mists, I hear its lure
But will you ever set me free?
Your love stole my soul and now demands a fee
Acceptance, the price for my cure
Salvation is calling to me
I taste the light that holds darkness’s key
Its touch is soft, its shades cool and pure
But will you ever set me free?
There is one who has woken my love to a certain degree
Is it time, or is it premature?
Salvation is calling to me
Her name is Marie
I say and think it with guilt and demure
But will you ever set me free?
Oh to lose a love meant to be
To have touched Elysium, then left behind to endure
Yet still salvation calls to me
But will you ever set me free?

Door to light
A key of darkness
One to find
One to hold
Balance unveils true beauty
Soul, come back to me
ยฉ judeitakali
This is all one poem with three different forms. I love these forms and how they challenge me:
- For Colleen’s tanka Tuesday ekphrastic photo , I wrote a trio of Abhanga poems.
- For Caley’s writephoto , I wrote a villanelle.
- For Sadje’s whatdoyousee , I wrote a Shadorma.
Hope you enjoy this. Stay safe, stay loving.
66 responses to “Lost soul. #Abhanga #Villanelle #Shadorma”
Such an awesome post for all the prompts. Good one, Jude. ๐
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Thank you so much Michaela ๐๐ท
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You’re welcome โบ๏ธ
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Very skillfully use of the prompts to tell your story of love and the conflict it created. Thanks for including my prompt in this lovely poem.
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Thanks Sadje. When a soulmate or partner passes away, it can be beyond devastating, especially if you had a whole life ahead of you.
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That is very true.
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This is beautiful Jude. This line in particular creates deeper thought and a sense of hope . โI taste the light that holds darknessโs keyโ As always, so beautifully penned. โฅ๏ธ
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Thanks a lot LaDonna ๐. It is a light that’s different for all of us, more metaphoric than literal.
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A seamless stitchery of perfect poetry which weaves a story so well. Superb, Jude ๐
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Thank you so much ๐ Chris๐ค๐ค
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I always like how you approach the same ideas from different sides. I especially like the way you used language in the first one. (K)
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I’m glad you pick up on that K. Perspective is such a big part of me and my writing. I never like to set anything in stone.
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O wow! What a beauty this poem is. I flow is the poem for one is splendid and reading through it felt like I was reading some sort of movie script, it is incredible. ๐๐๐๐
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Thank you so much Daphny. These forms are beautiful, and I try my best to do them justice. ๐๐
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You’re welcome! You did them justice for sure. ๐๐
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Wonderful!
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Thanks a lot.
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Jude, like Kerfe said, I live the way you choose to approach the prompts with different poetic forms. Your abhanga trio is superb. Waterhouse’s paintings are full of creative energy. I think you picked up on the woman’s emotions. The crystal ball is such a giveaway… I wonder what she saw? โค
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Thank you so much Colleen. I think she saw both dreams and nightmares, for I think I fear and hope are often inseparable.
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You are so right! Those two emotions are all balled up together. I hope all fears are conquered. โค
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Being fearless is not entirely a positive, but yes, the fears that inhibit us ought to be conquered. ๐๐๐พ
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Jude,
I love these lines in particular, but all are elegantly crafted:
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David
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Thank you so much David๐๐พ๐๐พ
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Wonderful one ๐ ๐ ๐
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Hi Vani. Been a while. Glad to see you here. Thank you ๐
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Wonderful, Jude! My favourite is the Villanelle ๐
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Thanks a lot Ingrid. One day I’ll write the perfect villanelle (for me). It’s such a challenging form to make work but it’s so beautiful and drives the message in.
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I enjoy writing and reading them!
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Great verses for all the prompts, Jude ๐๐
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Thanks alot harmony. ๐๐พ
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All three forms are wonderfully written. I love your poetry,Jude!๐
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Thanks alot Jane. I really write it for more than just me. I’m glad you join me on these poetic journeys.
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Welcome, Jude! I am too glad for meeting such a nice personality.๐
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Oh, my! What a delicious and beautifully written post. You mastered the prompts in your usual excellent style. โค๏ธ
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Thank you so much Eugi for the appreciation. ๐ค๐
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My pleasure, Jude!
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Beautifully written โค๐น
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Thanks a lot. You’ve been missing and missed.
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You’re very welcome!
Thank you for your kind words on my intermittent appearances here! I hope all is well with you and yours!
Many blessings!
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This is so beautiful! Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you too. It was a pleasure. ๐๐พ
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This is beautiful, Jude. You have captured the spirit of the painting.
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Thank you so much Robbie. ๐๐๐ค๐ท
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These poems are all beautiful, Jude! I have so many poetic forms to learn. ๐
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Thank you so much Yvette. It’s a fun process learning them.
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This is so beautifully written Jude! I especially loved “The past grips my present / How delicious its kiss! / How tempting its lost bliss!” ๐
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Thank you so much Tanvi ๐
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Beautiful poetry as always, Jude. โค
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Thank you so much Diana. ๐ค
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Very nice!
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I enjoyed the different forms.
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Thank you so much.
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Beautiful, Jude — the imagery and the poetic flow. Bravo!
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Thank you so much Gwen. I’ve been over to your site and there’s so much I want to read. You’ll be hearing from me soon๐๐พ๐
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Beautiful poemโค๏ธ
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Thank you so much. ๐๐พ
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Youโre welcome
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great
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Thank you ๐๐พ
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Your story poem carry the theme of love and loss to new levels.
And it reads as if it comes from a past era filled with romance, challenges, and the hope of renewal.
(a side note; when you copy your url for Mr. linky make sure it has the http//: in front of it – https://wordeologist.wordpress.com/2022/01/19/lost-soul-abhanga-villanelle-shadorma/ – without the http:// the link takes us to an Opps that can’t be found page;
wordeologist.wordpress.com/2022/01/19/lost-soul-abhanga-villanelle-shadorma/ doesn’t work.)
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Thank you so much for the appreciation Jules.
And the link tip as well๐๐ค๐ค๐
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There isn’t much I understand tech wise – so I’m glad I can help ๐
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so many hugs
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(((Hugs)))
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