Loved and unloved #tanka prose

#whatdoyousee

To think I thought I knew you. To have shoveled all my doubt to the furthest echelons of mind and memory. And then to lock it away. And to trust. And to love on…

the gifts once given
times my joy would come from yours
bonds of happiness
the phone by which you waited
the lamp by which you wrote me

A girly girl if ever there was; you were irresistible. With a mellifluous laughter that swooned me into submission, and a refinement which had me spellbound. You had it all; the deft curtsy, the twinkling blush, and the arrousing flirt. I fell willingly; addicted to you.

only yesterday
changing seasons brought wonder
until love was spent
and this life became mundane
and doubt kicked down its prison

Since then I have dialed the number to that girly phone beside that princess lamp; remnants of our love. As I listened I recalled; the vodka we’d drink through late nights beside that very phone, and the lace we’d leave behind on our way to a lover’s boudoir. It was once our lovedrunk voices that answered but now it is only yours; yours and another’s that say, “sorry we are not home. After the tone, leave us a message.”

bitter and battered
these sayings of modern youth
true until disproved
‘she’ you love is never yours
it is always just your turn

copyright judeitakali.


I was hanging with some friends recently, including some married ones, and we all seemed to agree through reminiscence and some retellings that indeed, “she is never yours, it’s only your turn.” I wonder what you think; about the tanka prose poetry, and this theory.

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71 responses to “Loved and unloved #tanka prose”

  1. Wow! Wonderful tanka prose, Jude.💙 I don’t know about the saying but I think we should love the one who loves us more than the one we love the most.

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    1. Thank you Jane, I just added more to the last prose paragraph. Alas I agree with you, but these hearts tend to want what they want.

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      1. I agree with you.The heart is more inclined towards love and therefore the analogy of the heart is love, my friend .🙂

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      2. Did you get my email, Jude?

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  2. Brilliant, Jude! I love your last line. What a powerful thought! That mindset can truly lead to healing and acceptance. 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much Yvette. I never looked at it that way, but it makes sense.

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  3. An interesting point to ponder, Jude: does anyone ever truly belong to anyone else?

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    1. No, I don’t think so, not in love at least. Though slave labour has indeed evolved to fancier ways of owning people. It is these modern sayings of ‘my’ boyfriend, ‘my’ wife where the last phrase originates.

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  4. Jude, stunning tanka prose! As far as “belonging…” I’m a romantic at heart. I’d like to think that we all have our soulmate, that person that helps to complete us in a circular way—together we are more than two separate beings. My husband and I will celebrate our 37th wedding anniversary on Saturday. ❤

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    1. Oh, congratulations Colleen. You are an inspiration in everything you do. The concept of soulmate really does go deep and devisive, but personally I do believe it happens. There are just so many factors. Look at Romeo and Juliet to begin with.

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      1. The key is friendship. When you’re friends first, that’s when the magic happens. ❤

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        1. I do know a few couples who just ‘zinged’ on sight, and friendship came later. But I must ask you what you think, does each one of us only have the one soulmate?

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          1. I think we find many soulmates throughout our lives. But there is always one that you fall for with that special kind of love. The friendship comes in and so does respect. That’s my recipe for a happy marriage. LOL! My husband has always believed in me, even when I didn’t believe in myself. He encouraged me to grow on my own and with him. That’s key! ❤

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            1. Sounds magical. I sigh Colleen, for if only love was not unique for us all. But yes, growing while with someone is usually a good bet, that i believe. Thank you so much🙏🏾

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              1. And, Jude… that’s how you write your characters. ❤

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  5. Such a beautiful poem Jude. There are no guarantees in love but loving someone should be it’s own reward. Thanks for joining in with a lovely poem.

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    1. I totally agree with you Sadje. Thank you so much for saying this. It’s a wonderful way to look at this thing; love.

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      1. You’re very welcome

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  6. Ah this is absolutely brilliant, I guess until we find the one’s for us we are simply a turn in someone’s life as they are in ours.

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    1. I do agree. If only there was a guarantee that we would find that one eventually. Odds are not fully in favour.

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      1. Yeah if only but life is unpredictable, the ones you think was meant for you usually turns out to be quite the opposite.

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  7. Such a wonderful write, Jude! Love need not necessarily mean belonging or should it!

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    1. Thank you Punam. It is just this trend in East Africa(not sure about rest of world) that more young people usually sort of sell out to the higher bidder. it begs so many love questions.

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      1. That sounds more like a transaction and less like love. There is always a give and take in all relationships but when it entails more take and less give, love begins to wane. Sigh…one can go on and on…

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  8. I think that no one ever belongs to someone else–only through meeting at the center of equality can love thrive. (K)

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    1. i have to ask, what of belonging to each other? If both live in this way, then it’s soulmate love. If only one does, hence assuming another feels the same, then people say that they are wrong for doing so.

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      1. I agree it has to be mutual to work. But too often in my experience the man wants to control the woman like she is his property. I don’t associate soulmate with belonging to someone at all. A blending or merging of lives perhaps, but belonging doesn’t enter into it for me.

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        1. Here my generation have a saying that if she doesn’t scare you, then she’s not the one. Women run the homes and men are their purses. It often feels like naturally women own the men but guys usually know what they signed on for and accept it. I asked somewhere in this thread; isn’t the concept of faithfulness rooted in this ‘belonging’ to someone? and belonging is of the ‘heart’ not mind nor all of someone, though home is indeed where the heart is, the rest often come 2nd.

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          1. You always raise good points Jude. We are all shaped by our experience. I think faithfulness is necessary for trust, and without trust, you don’t really have any foundation for a relationship. Once that trust is broken it’s very hard to mend. (K)

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  9. Get rid of that shovel!

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    1. Alas so logical. But doubt is so detrimental to a peaceful love/relationship.

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      1. Maybe using another word than doubt would be helpful.
        I just found a page of synonyms and one might work better. 😉

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        1. I did use doubt in equivalence to mistrust.

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  10. I love your observations on life and relationships, Jude. Incredibly well done 💕🙂

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    1. Thank you so much Harmony. I’m always looking to learn.

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  11. You can’t own a person, you can’t change a person and love isn’t always reciprocated… but one day it will be. At least, that’s what the romantic in me believes. Beautifully and cleverly expressed, as always, Jude.💜

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    1. Thank you so much Chris. I guess it does depend on what love/relationship two people agree to get into because you as a person cannot belong to someone, but your heart espouses involuntarily. And where does the concept of faithfulness come from, if not from belonging?

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      1. Good point, Jude.

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  12. Stunning poetry and prose, Jude! At times, love can be fickle but true love can weather most anything. It’s finding the right person, IMO.

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    1. I know Eugi, and my amorous heart agrees fully with you. I am happy to get feedback from friends on this post and wanted to engage many in these comments. There are things even true love can’t weather. And yet someone finds another love and it feels true as well. I’m talking about things like cancer, covid, death in general.

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      1. I agree, love doesn’t conquer all. We would be a lot better off if it did but that’s not realistic.

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    1. Thank you so much for sharing, Eugi.

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      1. My pleasure, Jude!

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  13. I do not believe Faithfulness comes from belonging… faithfulness is anchored deep within one’s own internal strength of purpose… and the truth of it is exhibited long before the heart swims in the warm ocean of love…

    Belonging speaks of a commodity… and its owner… a mere hierarchy of relationship, where one thing occupies a rung above, or below another…

    Everyone is an individual who is weighed on the scales of truth, and trust… love can intensify one’s relationship, when fertilized with commitment… which would render negative impulses… impotent…!
    🇯🇲🏖️

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    1. All true, I agree. And yet, so many always seek to belong somewhere, and if it’s not a place, then it’s a person. Belonging in terms of ‘meant for’ and not ‘owned’

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  14. Lovely post!

    Myself, I am still trying to understand the love concept…

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    1. I don’t think we can ever fully understand it, but we can accept that we can’t understand it, and just enjoy it.

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  15. I have had my share of ‘false starts’…but I think true love can happen and last. If getting on over forty years in a marriage is any indication 🙂
    I would rather remember those good times with my spouse than the few that did not make the ‘grade’ with those who left me or I left.

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    1. Yeah a lifetime of a love does wash away the others, but the others surely teach us what love we want or which one doesn’t work for us, just a little lesson. I do agree and think our greatest love is indeed the greatest adventure.

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      1. Love is full of lessons. As is life 😀

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  16. Beautiful, my friend. I don’t think anyone can ever be anyone elses possession. We give love and we hope they keep it.

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    1. Belonging in the sense of home, not object.

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  17. Hi Jude, you changed your blog template, I like it. Beautiful prose.

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    1. Hi Elizabeth. Thank you so much. I’m still working on it this very moment. Though mostly the technical menu bits and socials.

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  18. Love this “With a mellifluous laughter that swooned me into submission, and a refinement which had me spellbound.” ❤

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    1. Thank you so much for the appreciation.

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  19. Wonderful progression through the prose and verse Jude.. I think you are right with the last line… until you meet someone who you know is the one for life and then it is the last love.

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    1. Thank you so much, Sally. Yeah, the evasive last one.

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  20. This is beautiful writing, Jude. I think…. we constantly should be trying to “deserve” our partners’ love (it works both ways, of course) precisely because neither partner belongs to the other.


    David

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    1. I agree completely. But think of belonging as finding ‘home’ and not as an ‘object’

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  21. This is captivating and I love it. Thanks 😊

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    1. Thank you for the appreciation.

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